The European Union decided to designate 2014 as the European Year for Reconciling Work and Family Life. As their main reasons the increasing conflict between family and work life with whom families all over Europe have to deal was stated. Throughout the year a special focus will be on social integration, child and family poverty, quality employment and, of course, work family life balance. The main aim is to rase awareness among the EU Memberstates for this cour themes and initiate them to support families. This should be done not just by encouraging already existing programms but also change policies in order to make life easier for families and creaty a family friendly work environment. In the End all of the European citizens should profit from this aggenda. But it is expected that specially women who are often the ones to manage a family are considered to be among the bigger benefiters. At the End of 2014 the EU anticipate an increas in quality of life and a better work life balance for it's citizens.
Brainstorming:
Aspect of the EU that interest me:
Beeing able to move to (nearly) every EU country and live and work there.
Brainstorming:
Aspect of the EU that interest me:
Beeing able to move to (nearly) every EU country and live and work there.
work life balance got worse
focus: social integration, child and family poverty, quality employment, work family life balance
initiate support for families, make life easier
profit woman
focus: social integration, child and family poverty, quality employment, work family life balance
initiate support for families, make life easier
profit woman
necessary for mental health
prevent burn out
family friendly work environment
labour market
change in policies in order to make it easier for families
Feedback No. 1: Register and Topic Sentence:
- Cut the "but"s
- don't say the same twice
- topic and Conclusion sentences are okay
Feedback No. 2: Vocab and Kohesion
- Change second sentence (confusing)
- look at initiate again
- expect and consider - saying twice the same thing
- benefiters not a word - beneficiaries
- by encouraging - by changing
- work family life balance does not exist
- the EU anticipates
Revised paragraph:
The European Union decided to designate 2014 as the European Year for Reconciling Work and Family Life. As the primary reason the
increasing conflict between family and work life, with whom families all
over Europe have to deal, was stated. Throughout the year a special
focus will be on social integration, child and family poverty, quality
employment and, of course, work family life balance. The main aim is to
rase awareness among the EU Member States for this cour themes and to inspire the individual governments to support families. This should be done not just by
encouraging already existing programms, but also by changing policies in order
to make life easier for families and creat a family friendly work
environment. All of the European citizens should profit from
this aggenda. However, it is expected that especially women, who are often to manage the family, are to be among the bigger
beneficiaries. At the End of 2014 the EU anticipates an increase in quality
of life and a better work life balance for its citizens.
Final paragraph:
The European Union has decided to designate 2014 as the European Year for Reconciling Work and Family Life. It was stated that the increasing conflict between family and work life, with which families all over Europe have to deal, has been a primary reason for this decision. Throughout the year the focus will be on social integration, child and family poverty, quality employment and, of course, work-family life balance. The main aim is to raise awareness among EU Member States of these core themes and encourage the individual governments to increas family support. This should be done not just by strengthen already existing programmes, but also by changing policies in order to make life easier for families and create a family-friendly work environment. Women, who are often the ones to manage a family, are considered to benefit most from these changes. In the End, the EU expects 2014 to bring an increase in quality of life and improvement in work-life balance for all European citizens.
Feedback No. 1: Register and Topic Sentence:
- Cut the "but"s
- don't say the same twice
- topic and Conclusion sentences are okay
Feedback No. 2: Vocab and Kohesion
- Change second sentence (confusing)
- look at initiate again
- expect and consider - saying twice the same thing
- benefiters not a word - beneficiaries
- by encouraging - by changing
- work family life balance does not exist
- the EU anticipates
Revised paragraph:
Final paragraph:
The European Union has decided to designate 2014 as the European Year for Reconciling Work and Family Life. It was stated that the increasing conflict between family and work life, with which families all over Europe have to deal, has been a primary reason for this decision. Throughout the year the focus will be on social integration, child and family poverty, quality employment and, of course, work-family life balance. The main aim is to raise awareness among EU Member States of these core themes and encourage the individual governments to increas family support. This should be done not just by strengthen already existing programmes, but also by changing policies in order to make life easier for families and create a family-friendly work environment. Women, who are often the ones to manage a family, are considered to benefit most from these changes. In the End, the EU expects 2014 to bring an increase in quality of life and improvement in work-life balance for all European citizens.
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